Do you think my story is good?

Wow!!! Great story! Especially for a 12-year old, I can bet you’re in honors classes.

When you finish the story PLEASE email me a copy

I read the whole thing

I got some spelling errors:

She saw countless graves, countless names, and she cried countless tears.

You used the word countless too much maybe someone will like that, but just pointing it out. countless tears made it sound funny.

“We have your best interests at heart,” she said, “We are just trying to help you. Well, we have to go the other dungeons now.”

I forgot what was wrong with this one ^^ -_-

“I was kidnapped,” he said, “And totured. I watched many die.”

you spelled “totured” wrong it’s tortured (pretty sure you know that but…)

Other than that, you’re good. you should show it to your language arts teacher, and she will maybe say something like “WOW you know you can publish it?”

I see in my book kids littler than you publishing books, and selling them.

You sound like a book writer

My email is aaronortega007@gmail.com – please email me a copy of your whole story.

thanks

Kid's Yoyo Doll Elephant - Fair Trade $26.00 Oh, the cuteness... This sweet doll is hand sewn with great care by fair trade artisans in Bolivia. Starting at the turn of the last century, quilters used their leftover fabrics to make these "yoyo" dolls....

Kid's Yoyo Doll Bunny - Fair Trade $26.00 Oh, the cuteness... This sweet doll is hand sewn with great care by fair trade artisans in Bolivia. Starting at the turn of the last century, quilters used their leftover fabrics to make these "yoyo" dolls....

Jenny Doll Pattern by Drena Vintage 1961 pattern, the Award Winning Jenny Doll by Drena. This pattern includes all pattern pieces and directions for making a cloth doll and clothing. No final size given, but looks to be a finished doll of over 24"....

Sweet Ecstasy & Bambole (2pc) [VHS] $8.99 ...

Child's Play 2 $3.33 Chucky, a diabolically evil doll, is back again on another murderous rampage as he attempts to possess the soul of a young boy....

Molly P. Originals 13 inch Jenny Doll $21.3 Molly P. Originals 13 inch Jenny Doll

Molly P. Originals 13-inch Jenny Doll $21.69 *Jenny doll has pretty blonde hair which is held back by a white satin ribbon *Hazel-eyed Molly P Originals collectible doll has a satisfied expression on her face *Adorable Jenny doll has a darling three-piece ensemble *Stark white dress *Ribbed bodice *Full skirt *Embroidered near the hem with delicate dusty pink roses *Short-sleeved white blouse with an embroidered collar *White pantaloons *Matching embroidered blanket included

Molly P. Originals 13-inch Jenny Doll $22.72 *Jenny doll has pretty blonde hair which is held back by a white satin ribbon *Hazel-eyed Molly P Originals collectible doll has a satisfied expression on her face *Adorable Jenny doll has a darling three-piece ensemble *Stark white dress *Ribbed bodice *Full skirt *Embroidered near the hem with delicate dusty pink roses *Short-sleeved white blouse with an embroidered collar *White pantaloons *Matching embroidered blanket included

Molly P. Originals 13-inch Jenny Doll $19.44 *Jenny doll has pretty blonde hair which is held back by a white satin ribbon *Hazel-eyed Molly P Originals collectible doll has a satisfied expression on her face *Adorable Jenny doll has a darling three-piece ensemble *Stark white dress *Ribbed bodice *Full skirt *Embroidered near the hem with delicate dusty pink roses *Short-sleeved white blouse with an embroidered collar *White pantaloons *Matching embroidered blanket included

Jenny $22.5 Jenny

Jenny $17.95 Jenny

Jenny $14.4 Jenny

Jenny $13.67 Jenny

Jenny Neighborhood Kids Doll Collection by ShowStoppers $49.99 Little baby "Jenny" is part of the prominent Neighborhood Kids Collection line that is from the award winning designer Florence Maranuk and founder of Show Stoppers which produces the largest variety of high quality porcelain dolls available anywhere. ShowStoppers skilled artisans attention to detail innovative designs and use of exquisite materials is displayed so sweetly with baby Jennys shiny light auburn baby hair long eye lashes and tender big brown eyes her fair complexion showcasing her chubby rosy baby cheeks her delicately featured baby nose and little pink lips. Sweet little baby Jenny is dress in a baby soft creamed colored jumper that is printed with light pastel yellow chicks. Jenny s has a matching hat a flipped up rim in the front with a decorative flower and matching little baby booties that have little decorative bows will warm her sweet little baby feet and toes. Baby Jenny s cherished teddy bear and baby blanket match her cozy little jumper. Baby Jenny is 24" when standing and 14" when sitting. Her face neck breast plate arms and legs are made of fine quality porcelain. Jenny s neck is jointed and she is poseable. Sweet baby Jenny is a treasured addition to any collector s collection or a timeless gift that can be shared and passed down through generations. ShowStoppers different lines of prestigious fine quality award winning porcelain dolls are avidly sought by knowledgeable collectors. Baby "Jenny" is so sweet and loveable her innocence little baby face will warm your heart with her unique expression that captures the perfect precious image of a little baby girl.

Doll $23.95 Doll

Doll $39.5 Doll

Doll $8.99 Doll

On the Doll $6.99 On the Doll

Doll $6.48 Doll

Doll By Doll $11.99 Doll By Doll

Jenny $14.98 Jenny : The Lengthening Shadows by Nick Mag Published in 2002 by Washington House

Jenny $3.48 Jenny by Beth P. Wilson Library Binding Published in 1990 by Atheneum

Jenny $26.99 Trapped in a small Arizona town by her abusive father and tormented by her relatives, young pregnant Jenny is slowly boxed into a life not of her own choosing.

Jenny $17.49 When Jenny was published in 1911, Undset found herself called immoral — “this is a side of the free, artistic life that the vast majority of citizens would rather not know...

Jenny $5.48 The Curtiss Jenny was the Model T of airplanes: it was the first aircraft to be mass produced, and the one in which nearly every famous early aviator--from Charles Lindbergh to Amelia Earhart--learned to fly. This stunning nonfiction picture bok portrays the building of a Jenny from wood, wire, and cloth, bringing to life the science and art of the early days of flight.

Jenny Wren $9.5 Jenny Wren

The Ghost of Jenny $11.5 The Ghost of Jenny

Remembering Jenny $16.95 Remembering Jenny

Darling Jenny $13.95 Darling Jenny

Jenny Holzer $59.8 Jenny Holzer

Jenny Schmid $41.4 Jenny Schmid

Jenny's Dream $17.95 Jenny's Dream

Jenny Holzer $41.4 Jenny Holzer

A Suitor for Jenny $11.99 A Suitor for Jenny

Jenny Holzer $108.75 Jenny Holzer

Jenny Saville $46 Jenny Saville

Jenny Holzer $36 Jenny Holzer

PORTRAIT OF JENNY $13.99 PORTRAIT OF JENNY

Running For Jenny $7.99 Running For Jenny

Jenny's Fame $16.66 Jenny's Fame

Jenny Schmid $29.84 Jenny Schmid

Jenny's Story $29.95 Jenny's Story

Jenny Lind $20 Jenny Lind

Jenny's Dance $11.22 Jenny's Dance

The Wondrament of Jenny $16.23 The Wondrament of Jenny

Remembering Jenny $13.52 Remembering Jenny

Jenny's Dream $13.52 Jenny's Dream

The Ghost of Jenny $9 The Ghost of Jenny

Jenny's Story $62 Jenny's Story

Jenny Bell $15.37 Jenny Bell

Darling Jenny $8.96 Darling Jenny

Jenny Wren $6.35 Jenny Wren

Jenny Saville $56.5 Jenny Saville

Jenny Pitman $9.27 Jenny Pitman

Jenny $4.99 SHE LOST A BET AND BECAME A SLAVE! Its late in the twenty-first century, and slavery is once again an American institution. If a girl has the nerve, and the looks, she can gamble her freedom for riches. Jenny Marstens story begins when her gamble makes her the property of DiMarco Slaveholders.

Jenny $12.06 First published in 1911 when the author was 29, this unsparing novel tells the story of Jenny Winge, a talented Norwegian painter whose search for artistic inspiration in Rome lands her in the arms of a married man. Her decision to have their baby out of wedlock and raise it by herself brought charges of immorality against the author, winner of the Nobel Prize in literature in 1928, and the book. This is a new translation and the first English edition of Jenny since 1921, with censored passages restored."Everyone and everything leaps off the page." -- The New York Times Book Review

Jenny $12.52 First published in 1911 when the author was 29, this unsparing novel tells the story of Jenny Winge, a talented Norwegian painter whose search for artistic inspiration in Rome lands her in the arms of a married man. Her decision to have their baby out of wedlock and raise it by herself brought charges of immorality against the author, winner of the Nobel Prize in literature in 1928, and the book. This is a new translation and the first English edition of Jenny since 1921, with censored passages restored."Everyone and everything leaps off the page." -- The New York Times Book Review

Jenny $10.7 First published in 1911 when the author was 29, this unsparing novel tells the story of Jenny Winge, a talented Norwegian painter whose search for artistic inspiration in Rome lands her in the arms of a married man. Her decision to have their baby out of wedlock and raise it by herself brought charges of immorality against the author, winner of the Nobel Prize in literature in 1928, and the book. This is a new translation and the first English edition of Jenny since 1921, with censored passages restored."Everyone and everything leaps off the page." -- The New York Times Book Review

Jenny $10.84 First published in 1911 when the author was 29, this unsparing novel tells the story of Jenny Winge, a talented Norwegian painter whose search for artistic inspiration in Rome lands her in the arms of a married man. Her decision to have their baby out of wedlock and raise it by herself brought charges of immorality against the author, winner of the Nobel Prize in literature in 1928, and the book. This is a new translation and the first English edition of Jenny since 1921, with censored passages restored. Everyone and everything leaps off the page. The New York Times Book Review

Jenny $13.98 When Jenny was published in 1911, Undset found herself called immoral — “this is a side of the free, artistic life that the vast majority of citizens would rather not know.” The novel tells the story of Jenny Winge, a talented Norwegian painter who goes to Rome to seek artistic inspiration but ultimately betrays her own ambitions and ideals. After falling into an affair with the married father of a would-be suitor, Jenny has a baby out-of- wedlock and decides to raise the child on her own. Undset’s portrayal of a woman struggling toward independence and fulfillment is written with an unflinching, clear-eyed honesty that renders her story as compelling today as it was nearly a century ago.This new translation by Tiina Nunnally captures the fresh, vivid style of Undset’s writing and restores passages omitted from the only previous edition to appear in English, which was published in 1921. Most famous for her later, historical fiction set in Catholic, medieval Scandinavia, Undset stands revealed with Jenny, her first major novel, as an unsparing, compassionate, magnificent realist, the creator of works that are at once thoroughly modern and of enduring interest. “[Undset] was an uncommonly fine writer of fiction.”-- The New York Times Book Review“Jenny is a stunningly atmospheric yet frank and searching drama about a young woman painter struggling to reconcile her need to make art with her longing for and fear of love. This brooding book can stand with the best of the moderns.”-- Booklist

Doll $35.98 Doll by Tracey Sinclair Published in 2005 by Kennedy & Boyd

Doll $22.98 Doll by Tracey Sinclair Published in 2005 by Kennedy & Boyd

Jenny $4.99 A caring pilot loves a woman who is nearly destroyed by fear and guilt. Together, can they overcome the impossible and find true love?

Jenny $14.95 She has had more than a dozen books for children published worldwide, and writes curriculum material for Sunday schools...

Jenny $4.99 This book is in Used condition

Jenny $12 This book is in New - Excellent condition

Jenny $10.5 This book is in New - Excellent condition

Jenny $7.99 This book is in Good Used condition

Doll $3.99 A story of dark emotions and strange friendship, Doll is the eagerly awaited new title from Nicky Singer, following the triumph of her first children's book, Feather Boy. Tilly's biker mother gave Tilly a doll when she was on her deathbed. There is something strange about the doll, something dangerous - something which brings Tilly into the path of Jan, a South American boy with his own problems. But there are questions that have not been answered. Is Tilly's mother really dead, or is there a more painful reason for her absence?

Doll Wig $39.99 Doll Wig

Rag Doll $29.99 Rag Doll

Rag Doll $34.99 Rag Doll

Rag Doll $24.99 Rag Doll

Rag Doll $39.99 Rag Doll

Devil Doll $24.99 Devil Doll

Fairy Doll $9.99 Fairy Doll

The Doll's House $2.49 The Doll's House

The Doll's House $1.49 The Doll's House

The Doll's House $2.39 The Doll's House

The Doll's House $2.69 The Doll's House

The Doll's House $3.39 The Doll's House

The Captain's Doll $2.49 The Captain's Doll

The Captain's Doll $1.59 The Captain's Doll

The Captain's Doll $2.39 The Captain's Doll

The Captain's Doll $2.79 The Captain's Doll

The Captain's Doll $3.39 The Captain's Doll

Baby Doll $21.23 Baby Doll

Tokyo Doll $12.76 Tokyo Doll

China Doll $12.54 China Doll

Doll Town $13.25 Doll Town

Teenage Doll $12.99 Teenage Doll

Paper Doll $15.95 Paper Doll

Black Doll $15.16 Black Doll

The Purple Doll $14.95 The Purple Doll

The Doll's House $5.57 The Doll's House

Doll Hair $17.15 Doll Hair

Doll 2 $8.99 Doll 2

Party Doll $7.18 Party Doll

The Wheat Doll $14.57 The Wheat Doll

The Lonely Doll $7.43 The Lonely Doll

The Doll in the Garden $13.76 The Doll in the Garden

A Doll's House $8.95 A Doll's House

Doll Crafts $15.43 Doll Crafts

Doll Dining $15.43 Doll Dining

Doll Purses $15.43 Doll Purses

Lunatic Doll $32.78 Lunatic Doll

A Doll's House $10.62 A Doll's House

Doll School $15.43 Doll School

Doll Scrapbook $15.43 Doll Scrapbook

Voodoo Doll $7.19 Voodoo Doll

Doll 6 $8.99 Doll 6

The Doll in the Garden $5.53 The Doll in the Garden

Doll Maker $13.29 Doll Maker

Doll 5 $8.99 Doll 5

A Doll's House $16.44 A Doll's House

I, Doll $22.95 I, Doll

The Nutcracker Doll $14.61 The Nutcracker Doll

Doll Fashionistas $26.99 Doll Fashionistas

The Apple Doll $13.76 The Apple Doll

Trouble Doll $21.73 Trouble Doll

Doll Play $8.55 Doll Play

Trouble Doll $13.29 Trouble Doll

The Grandmother Doll $6.46 The Grandmother Doll

A Doll's House $12.6 A Doll's House

Vampire Doll $8.99 Vampire Doll

Bran Doll $9.89 Bran Doll

Baby Doll $13.45 Baby Doll

Doll Parties $18.55 Doll Parties

Satin Doll $32.38 Satin Doll

The Prettier Doll $57.95 The Prettier Doll

The Doll's House $13.6 The Doll's House

A Doll's House $14.5 A Doll's House

A Doll for Navidades $14.61 A Doll for Navidades

Baby Doll $32.2 Baby Doll

Doll Jewlery $15.43 Doll Jewlery

Broken Doll $6.29 Broken Doll

A Doll's House $7.27 A Doll's House

Doll Tees $18.55 Doll Tees

Paper Doll $12.97 Paper Doll

The Lonely Doll $13.76 The Lonely Doll

Doll Creature $10.99 Doll Creature

Satin Doll $31.99 Satin Doll

Satin Doll $12.99 Satin Doll

Doll Domination $11.99 Doll Domination

Satin Doll $7.99 Satin Doll

Satin Doll $8.99 Satin Doll

China Doll $8.99 China Doll

Living Doll $14.99 Living Doll

The Wheat Doll $10.54 The Wheat Doll

I, Doll $16.91 I, Doll

China Doll $15.99 China Doll

The Sleeping Doll $31.08 The Sleeping Doll

The Nutcracker Doll $10.57 The Nutcracker Doll

Doll 3 $6.77 Doll 3

China Doll $10.17 China Doll

Daisy and the Doll $9.71 Daisy and the Doll

A Sawdust Doll $27.76 A Sawdust Doll

Doll 4 $6.77 Doll 4

Doll House $9.95 Doll House

Doll Purses $11.17 Doll Purses

A Sawdust Doll $16.44 A Sawdust Doll

The Prettier Doll $52.61 The Prettier Doll

A Sawdust Doll $20 A Sawdust Doll

The Doll Book $20 The Doll Book

The Sleeping Doll $9.16 The Sleeping Doll

A Doll's House $6.76 A Doll's House

The Sleeping Doll $10.17 The Sleeping Doll

A Doll's House $9.84 A Doll's House

Paper Doll $12.99 Paper Doll

The Black Doll $11.97 The Black Doll

Doll Jewlery $12.91 Doll Jewlery

A Doll's House $9.9 A Doll's House

Jenny Holzer $42.18 Artwork by Jenny Holzer. Text by Robert Storr.

The Doll $17.06 The city of Warsaw, under Russian rule in the late 1870s, is the setting for this story. The middle-aged hero, Wokulski, bold and successful in business, is being destroyed by his obsessive love for the frigid, aristocratic society 'doll' Izabella.

Jenny Jones $3.48 Jenny Jones : My Story by Jenny Jones, and Patsi Bale Cox Published in 1997 by Andrews Mcmeel Pub

Jenny's Fish Shop $19.99 Jenny's Fish Shop

Jenny Jordan Frogley $14.99 Jenny Jordan Frogley

Histoire De Miss Jenny $2.49 Histoire De Miss Jenny

Histoire De Miss Jenny $1.49 Histoire De Miss Jenny

Histoire De Miss Jenny $2.39 Histoire De Miss Jenny

Histoire De Miss Jenny $2.69 Histoire De Miss Jenny

Histoire De Miss Jenny $3.39 Histoire De Miss Jenny

The Legend Of Jenny''s Angels $18.81 The Legend Of Jenny''s Angels

The Jenny Craig Story $26.99 The Jenny Craig Story

Jenny: The Lengthening Shadows $38.95 Jenny: The Lengthening Shadows

The Legend Of Jenny''s Angels $21.45 The Legend Of Jenny''s Angels

Jenny And The Jaws Of Life $20.5 Jenny And The Jaws Of Life

Jenny Baxter Journalist $15.5 Jenny Baxter Journalist

Jenny''s Backdoor Lust $11.78 Jenny''s Backdoor Lust

Jenny Turnbull: Terrorist Huntress $13.5 Jenny Turnbull: Terrorist Huntress

The "Wondrament" of Jenny $20.5 The "Wondrament" of Jenny

AUNTIE JENNY ROCKS Bib $12 AUNTIE JENNY ROCKS

Jenny Burton Experience $14.97 Jenny Burton Experience

Jenny Found A Penny $20.57 Jenny Found A Penny

Jenny And The Jaws Of Life $7.36 Jenny And The Jaws Of Life

Jenny Keeps Talking $7.27 Jenny Keeps Talking

Good-Bye Jenny $21.04 Good-Bye Jenny

Jenny Speaks Out $19.4 Jenny Speaks Out

Jenny Giraffe And The Streetcar Pa $14.67 Jenny Giraffe And The Streetcar Pa

The Intelligent Design of Jenny Chow $7.27 The Intelligent Design of Jenny Chow

Jenny Finn 1 $13.49 Jenny Finn 1

A Solstice Tree For Jenny $12.58 A Solstice Tree For Jenny

Jenny Jordan Frogley $10.99 Jenny Jordan Frogley

Evenflo Jenny Jump Up $21.49 Evenflo Jenny Jump Up

Jenny Bristow USA $20.99 Jenny Bristow USA